Wednesday, February 3, 2010

jeremy b



SpongeBob and the evil lap tops


One day in the space city of bob town the people lap tops where turning evil and tacking over the town . the people of the town tried to stop them but the lap tops where to strong. They called in the army and the army couldn’t kill the lap tops. The people of bob town where running out of time.
The president of bob town was in the bath room when all of a sadden the secret serves come in and told him that they had to go now before the lap tops find the president! They tack him out of the bath room and find the lap tops whiting for them the lap tops kill the president. The town was scared what will they do who will the kill the lap tops who will be the president why am I asking you all these questions?
Them one day some one thought of an idea that would change the history of bob town for ever. The man’s name was bill gateway he said that he can make a robot that would kill all the lap tops so he started to make the robot it would have a laser in each hand and guns in his ears. It took 3 weeks to make the robot. When it was done they named it SpongeBob.
They sent SpongeBob out to kill the lap tops the net books where easy but the big lap tops where not he what and killed all the lap tops but one the master lap top with was the Mac. They had a big fight SpongeBob fired his laser but It did not kill the Mac. Then SpongeBob had an idea he would take the Mac to the lake and push him in. when they got to the lake SpongeBob push the Mac in the Mac stated sparking smoke come out of the key board then the Mac died with a boom. They people of bob town where so happy of SpongeBob they said that would put him there sky."IKN: SpongeBob Carranza prepares his excuses." IKN. N.p., n.d. Web. 3 Feb. 2010.





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6 comments:

  1. Jeremy- Your story was very short. And, your constellation is only one star? Otherwise, okay job on the story!

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  2. I like the idea of spongebob and only one star for the constellation. Good job.

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  3. There was only one star in you constaltion but other wise it was very good.

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  4. Jeremy, I liked your story but you should revise your work.

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  5. Good story, I liked the ideas and detail. NExt time try proof reading it would make it a lot easier to read, otherwise nice job.

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  6. I agree with Mark and Bennet, you had the right idea for your story but the spelling could have been a little bit better.

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