Monday, February 1, 2010

Jennie L.



Long ago there long lived Zeus the King, but the village of the Olympian Gods was not safe. The evil Llama King of Peru was coming to take their kingdom away. Zeus was not powerful enough for the evil Llama King, so he sent his greatest weapon, the Koi Brothers. They fought side by side in combat for the great King. They were just as powerful as the great Zeus, two of a kind. So the king decided to have them fight for him in the battle. They stood ready and waiting for the Llama King and his great army to arrive and for the battle to begin, waiting and waiting, for 3 days they waited, then finally the King and his army arrived. The battle was about to begin, the biggest battle there was.


People from miles away, came to see the battle. They were more excited than ever. People called out to other planets just because of the battle. This fight brought people from miles and even galaxies away to come and witness this event. People were lined up from the village of the Olympian Gods all the way into another Galaxy. But the Koi brothers did not want to disappoint their ruler King Zeus or any of their fans, so instead of doing as they were told which was to greet and meet fans. They fought with each other, not hard, but enough to get them pumped for the battle. And now they were truly ready.


One by one the brothers fought of the army the Llama had built to bring them down. Zeus had to bring all of his power into a special bag; he said to the Koi Brothers, “This bag is full of my power, the power that I use every day to make rain and thunder. Only use this power if you are in grave danger.” The Koi Brothers accepted this great gift. Day after day the Koi Brothers fought, waiting for their turn to take down the Llama King. Everything is silent, and everyone stares.
The souls of the Gods were proud; they sit and watch after the Koi Brothers do their duty. Finally, their moment of truth has come. The Koi Brothers against the Llama King. The Kind uses all his power, and BAM, he takes the Brothers down with one hit. As they lie on the floor and just stare at each other wondering what to do now, they remember they have the powerful bag of Zeus’s power.


As the Llama King laughs away as he defeated the Koi Brothers, they slowly pull out the bag an open it. With the power of Zeus and the power of themselves, they destroyed the King. The power of Zeus surrounded him and he left powerless, he fell to the ground and surrendered. He gave all his power to the Zeus the King. He was put into jail with the power of the Koi Brothers looking after him.


Since they crushed the King, the Great Zeus granted them with a gift. He granted them the sight that everyone could see, that people would know it was because of them. The gift of the sky night stars. So now every night people can look up into the night sky and see the Koi Brothers. They are there, fighting anything horrible that comes our way. Protecting us from within the sky.

"Koi care for koi lover: How to Care For Koi Fish - The Right Way." Koi care for koi lover. N.p., n.d. Web. 1 Feb. 2010. .

5 comments:

  1. Very creative story, I liked the concept and Sammy's llama. How did you come up with the idea to write this story?

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  2. I like the way that you wrapped everything around just one concept and I like how the story was put into place around the constellation starting point.

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  4. You did a great job I like how you described things also I liked how your story turned out. I could picture what everything that you were saying. Good Job.

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  5. I like the whole concept of your story! Nice job!

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